I am sailing the seven seas with my best buddies .We can do whatever we
like. No parents telling us what to do,
we can eat all the junk food we like and will never have to brush our teeth
again .Life is great. Then my best mate Henry yells out" LAND AHOY" . YAY we
finally made it . But now for the real journey.
We gather round and discuss where we are going to go. Then with that we
were off. We walked for ages then we came to a stop. We found it, X marks
the spot . Then mum calls out " come in now boys, it's getting dark".
By Ruby
Hello Ruby,
ReplyDeleteWhat an adventurous 100 word challenge. You started with a great opening sentence, which is a brilliant way to capture the readers interest.
When you typed this up you started new lines a little randomly, but it made your work feel like a sea shanty, very nautical. Maybe think about doing a song next time, as you have really started to get a rhythm going.
Keep up the good work Ruby
Ms Woodgate (Team 100WC) Maidstone, Kent.UK