On hot days I would lie there in my room thinking of what I could do I came up with an idea, I could create a map of my own made up business!! So I got a sheet of paper and a pen and named the business the Lucky Sweet shop. I decided that the only savoury stuff I would sell there would be hot chips hot dogs and burgers. I said to myself i could make the workers have jet packs on that will allow them to fly.I also decided that i would have a hire able boat to row.
By Scarlett
You should check your punctuation! I needs to always be a capital if it is by itself, and you need to put (a) space(s) after full stops!
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I liked this story but next time u could add some commas. Harriett :)
ReplyDeletegood story great use of the words
ReplyDeleteGood job i liked your descriptive words but maybe work on your punctuation. - Sophia.
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