I can see the finish line and it feels amazing to be coming in first but then I slip and fall down a big ditch into thorns and mud I feel dizzy and I can’t see properly. When I stand up I feel weird as if my feet were off the ground then I realise I am. I am moving up and up it was unbelievable. Then I realise I was getting too high, is this the end? But I start floating down and I could see the finish line again I was coming last but atleast I can finish…..
By Charlotte
To Charlotte
ReplyDeleteLove your story
Next time instead of putting "I cant see properly" you should put "I couldn't see properly" or put "my vision went blurry"
From Lucy :)
Hi Charlotte
ReplyDeleteI love how you started your story with you in the race. I like how you described the ditch (thorns,mud,dizzy) Maybe try next time to replace big with a more interesting word.
From Anna Room 4 valley school.