“The ultimate running race!”Said comater 1.
“Yes it is, billy.”said comater 2.
“It’s the flash, quicksilver, Usain Bolt, sonic, Florence Griffith Joyner and zoom!” Said billy,“and the race begins!” Said comater 2.
Usain Bolt is in the lead, coming up is zoom trying to get in the lead… Then. Bang!
Zoom dropped dead to the ground from a sniper.
Then batman comes along and knocks out the sniper.
Then eggman comes along and blows up batman.
Then deadpool comes along and shoots eggman.
The race continues.
Quicksilver is the lead ‘I can see the finish line’ but then the flash takes the lead and wins, in 2nd place is Quicksilver, in 3rd place is Usain bolt, in 4th place is sonic, in 5th place is Florence Griffith Joyner and 6th place is zoom.
By Rawiri.
I liked how you wrote in third person but you need to get your spelling write
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found it good that you went and took a differnt turn in writing you need to work on using bigger and more descibtive words
ReplyDeleteGood story. I like how you put a good amount of punctuation and you put super hero's in your story. Cool! from Ajay - Room 4.
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