I could feel the blood flowing through my veins, short pulses ran through my fingertips. My arms were pumping to the beat of my heart each movement completely in sync. Suddenly I felt a burst of adrenaline I could see the finish line, then out of nowhere my legs caved from underneath me sending me sprawling across the track. I finished up lying flat on my back gazing up at the sky. My breath was hoarse and time itself began to blur and fade from reality. Before I could fully grasp the situation I heard footsteps and I saw the blurry silhouettes of of three men standing above me...
it was good lots of decriptive language
ReplyDeleteWhat a great story. I love your adjectives but sometimes I don't even know what they mean because I'm only year 5. I was a great story but you should try making it a bit less full on.
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