Wednesday, August 10, 2016

Week 3 - The running race by Ryan T

I was at the Olympics.I was in a running race.I was feeling very happy because I was coming foirst in front of everyone.I just wanted to be first to make me happy and my family. I could see the finish line but I fell over and hurt myself really bad.

 By Ryan T 
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4 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 10, 2016 at 2:27 PM

    Great story. Next time check your spelling and grammar. Apart from that I loved your story. - Sophia

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  2. AnonymousAugust 11, 2016 at 2:21 PM

    l really liked your story because it made sense and because it was a cool story bye yong

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  3. AnonymousSeptember 8, 2016 at 4:25 PM

    Hi Ryan, I like this sentence, I could see the finish line, but I fell over and hurt myself really bad.

    By AVIV

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  4. AnonymousSeptember 18, 2016 at 6:54 PM

    It's a ok story it would be great if could use some more punctuation.

    by Keoni

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