Today was the day the day I got to see some of my favourite players. They just won the world cup and Everyone was going to be there. As I got my All Blacks jersey on I realised we had to get there early to get a good spot.i screamed to my parents to hurry up. We got in the car and raced down to the parade only to realize everyone had the same idea.
For the whole parade all we could do was listen as there was to many people to see.
Nice story! I loved how when you started a new sentence you used a different started, eg. "Today, they, as, I, we."
ReplyDeleteRemember to use more punctuation, and that "I's" have capitals.
- Abby