Hi my name is Isabella and i'm a professional dancer. Today I went swimming at a local pool near where I train for dance. I'm a very busy person because i'm also training to become a
professional swimmer. My swimming coach said if I keep up the training i will most likely be ready to compete in a championship. Anyway when I was swimming I saw some green gas rise from a person's bag I yelled bomb bomb thinking it was a bomb but actually it was just some persons science experiment Whops !!! By Amber N
Great story! Next time work on your punctuation, spelling & capital letters.
ReplyDeleteAmber T & Michaela :)
I like how you've explained who the person is. Next time check the words in case there are any words that aren't spelt correctly
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I loved it. There is just a couple of things, 1. You need some speech marks for I yelled "bomb bomb", 2. You spelt saw wrong in your title.But apart from that it was AWESOME
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