Tuesday, February 16, 2016

The Fire - Sam Crn

Zzz……Zzz….DING! DING! DING! 
Wake up guys there’s a FIRE!
Quickly get into your bird wings on.
Okay let’s go!

Right, Sam, you hook up the hose. Jim you get the axes.
Sam and Jim went to go and cut the door down.
Whoosh! Went the fire and smoke out the door. They went zooming in and could hear someone yelling for help and there was a baby screaming.
They looked in the living room, bathroom and the kitchen but couldn’t find them. Then they saw stairs but whoosh they caught fire and couldn’t get up the stairs.
Sam had an idea. He went outside and saw people on the balcony so he got the hose while Jim grabbed people in his bird wings. Sam put the fire out.
Yay everyone said.


Sam Crn
Room 11


9 comments:

  1. Awesome story Sam. You & Jim sound like real hero's 😊

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  2. good work relly liked it keep it up :Brandon

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  3. good work relly liked it keep it up :Brandon

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  4. good work Sam I really like the sound effects so good job. from Connor

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  5. Good job I think the you could just make it more descriptive.
    - From Scarlett

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  6. good job sam it is a cool but you could work on is bing a bit more descriptive to the story.

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  7. I like how you used in your story the Zzz and the ding in your story.

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