As I wandered along the dusty road eachI took triggered a distant memory. Hesitantly I walked up the stone path and rested my hand on the door bell. I heard thumping down the hallway the door was flung open and I was greeted by a short woman whom seemed flustered at the time she took one look at me before slamming the door in my face. I felt like I had failed but how was I to know what was waiting for me on the other side of that door.
By Zoe
real discriptive writting it read like a horra movie scarry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you nead to work on making it longer
ReplyDeleteit was good desriptive language but u missed a space after each
ReplyDeleteHey Zoe
ReplyDeleteCool story but next time proofread.
I love reading your story's.They paint a picture in my mind.You missed a space after each so be a bit more careful.I think you should maybe end at least one story in a happy ending.But in my opinion you are a great story writer.
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