It was a bright and colourful day. I was biking down the railway reserve and then the ground shook like a raging earthquake . I stopped my bike and looked at the closest hill as it started to split like a jacket zipper. I stood in shock like a frozen ice block wondering what to do next.I could go around it I could go back but I wanted to jump over it.
So i started to charge at it like a formula1 car it felt like I was going to break the sound barrier. As soon as my wheels left the ground it felt like i was flying to space I could see the clouds then I heard a BOOM as i hit the ground. As I looked back at what I had done I thought how much fun i have had in that moment flying in the sky.
By Brandon
Good story but you need to have capital I not lower case i by Kynan
ReplyDeleteHi Brandon, I really like how you described your self e.g I stood in shock like a frozen ice block wondering what to do next. But next time you need to spend more time editing like for example you need to put a capital letter for i. Signed Dylan RM 4
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