1. Once apon a time there was a young kid flying a kite on a book.
2 "This is part of a story" said Ryan
3 The book feels like a wave on the beach
4 The kid looks like he is flying a kite up on top of the hill with mud under it.
5 The kid is having some fun
By Ryan
Awesome! Next time work on using more punctuation.
ReplyDelete~Michaela
I like this but maybe next time you could say if it was a boy or a girl or their name in stead of just saying the kid. Also you could use a bit more punctuation. - Sophia.
ReplyDeletei like how you explained what it felt like.
ReplyDeletemac
Nice story
ReplyDeleteNext time use check your punctuation
From Lucy :)
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