Once upon a time there lived a boy. He was sitting on a bench I wonder what he was waiting for. all of a sudden he jumped up looked like a bee bit him but no he brought out his kite i walked over to him hello i said GO AWAY he shouted why cause i said so okay okay i walked away . he looked every were couldnt find me HELLO HELLO were are you SORRY i told you to go away i popped out where i was hiding its okay i said do you want to be friends yep would you like to fly my kite okay i said once i finished flying his kite we got too too hot so he said i have 2 dollers want to bye an ice cream since they are 2 dollers yep so i got a choclate and my friend got a hokey pokey then we went home
by Tamara
Great story Tamara! Next time think about using more capital letters and punctuation:)~Michaela
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of this story it's really original , just remember that after a full stop there is a capital letter and I is always a capital letter. Amber N
ReplyDeleteNice story tamara but next time use more punctuation.
ReplyDeleteFrom Harriett.
Great story Tamara :) next time think about where you put your commas and capital letters. Also try spell checking it next time :-)
ReplyDeleteFrom Charlotte
I like how you made yourself the main character. Next time you need to work on using capital letters and full stops properly.
ReplyDeleteFrom Zoe
Amazing Story
ReplyDeleteNext time check your punctuation, spelling & make sure your story is under 100 words
From Lucy
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