I was staring into space and I saw the words “ watch out “ float across my mind. A loud beeping noise stung my ears. Suddenly a blaze caught my eye. I started to panic and crawled out of the room. I got into the hallway and screamed “ FIRE, FIRE “ at the top of my lungs. I opened the front door and ran for it. I got the letterbox and rang the firemen. I was scared for my family. I ran into my house and woke up my family. I crawled out with my family. I looked at my window, all I could see was flames. All the thoughts going through my mind made me cry. It’s all my fault I said loudly. My Mum hugged me and said “ But how would you know, See it can’t possibly be your fault”. I realized that things would never be the same.
By Lucy
Interesting Story,Next time use more commas instead of a whole load of sentences.
ReplyDelete-Danny
To Lucy
ReplyDeleteWOW this is a really amazing heart stopping story i like how you used the words blaze,stung,beeping,float.I like the sentence I saw the words “ watch out “ float across my mind.this is a really good story everything is perfect this has to be the best story i have read yet.:)