I was on the final stage of the Tour de France, I was in Prime position to win the Tour this year because I had the yellow jersey on. I was around 5 points ahead of my rival Chris Froome. If I won this stage I would be 10 points ahead of the comp. I was going down a massive hill at top speed. Somehow I managed to not fall over because if I did Chris Froome would win the stage and win the Tour de France. My fans were cheering me on. I could see the finish line, Then suddenly I hit a rock, Then a grate, My bike slipped, and I slipped. Chris Froome rounded the final corner. He cycled as fast as he could, I got up and sprinted……..
By Luke
You really set the scene this week although in the second to last sentence you used comma's in the place of full stops eg: ''I could see the finish line, Then''. This should be ''I could see the finish line, then''
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He cycled as fast as he could, I got up and sprinted...... I like this part of your story because it is a great ending to your story. I also like how use sprinted insted of ran.
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