One day in the 16th century a group of pirates with a ship called the vessel of mean pirates.They found an old map on their home island called the land of mee Harteys.
They settled off in the vessel of mean pirates the map says to go through the stormy thunder then to the happy pirate island and then to the crazy island of treasure. They go through the stormy thunder it was very stormy 12 hours later they made it through the storm. They go through the happy pirate island and finally they make it to The crazy island of treasure the treasure was a magic wand....
By Ben
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ReplyDelete' Well done, Ben, for attempting this week's 100wc. It has the makings of a good story. I love the name of the ship and also ' the land of me Harteys'. You have used some super descriptive language such as ' stormy thunder ' and ' crazy island '. To improve your writing, remember to check your punctuation as you need to add a few comas. Also try to vary your sentence openers.
What happened to this week's prompt ? You haven't included it ! '
Anessa (Team 100)