The wind and the rain was beating against the windows of my house like a drum .
The autumn leaves were swirling around. The colour of the leaves were golden and crunchy looking, they looked like a cornflake flying in the sky it looked amazing. I had a though and danced in the wind and rain, my hair looked incrediable like a loin in the wind. My sister thought it looked exciting and she joined me, we had a wonderful time dancing and swirling like the leaves.... Girls my mum calls, time to come in out of the rain.
By Brooklyn
i liked how you used descriptive words next time try and add speech marks when someone is talking
ReplyDeleteI love all the descriptive words! Next time, maybe highlight the words you needed to add in there so tht we know you have done that! Other than that I think it was great!
ReplyDeleteWell done.
~Zena~