One day a guy
named bob was walking around the park and found a suspicious x on the ground. X
marks the spot shouted a little kid. What shouted bob, the little kid handed bob a shovel. Bob started to dig and
dug up a big stash of money. the kid and bob went on a shopping spree and
bought a lot of useless junk. Then they went back to the park. And put the left
over money back where they got it from and went back home. over night bob
couldn’t stop thinking about the treasure. So over the night he stole it.
By Fynn
I Loved how you said useless junk.some bits of the story did not make sense, and again change the word went because it is a very boring verb. Over all great story.
ReplyDeleteEthan (Valley school) :)