Jim was sitting on his leopard printed couch,eating cornflakes and he was thinking about what will happen today. All of a sudden he started to choked on a cornflake, his face turned as blue as a blueberry.Then he passed out. He woke up in a jungle he hears what he thinks is to be a drum he runs to the noise and to his surprise a lion was playing the drum. To him it was very exciting and then before he knew it his feet started to move and he danced to the beat like he never danced before.
By Maddison
Maddison I love your story, you used great describing words and a funny theme.
ReplyDeleteRuby
I enjoyed your story immensely, Maddison! You worked the words for this week's challenge in seamlessly. I also like the simile you used; it really creates a picture in the reader's mind. There are a couple of places where you should separate your sentences for more effect, but other than that, this is a great piece! Keep writing!
ReplyDeleteMrs. Garner (Team 100)
Illinois, USA