Once there was a little village the little village was called mini village.
There was a girl here name was rose. One day her mum and dad went to the woods she sat at the window but they never came back. So one day she went to the woods she walked for along time then she stopped on a tree stump. Then it started to ran seeds then a bird came down it started to peaked the stump. Then it looked at rose she got up and run a way and the bird flyer where rose goes then the bird stopped flying.
By Madison
Nice story Madison. I liked how you joined your sentences. Next time though you could try to use different senetence starters.
ReplyDeleteFrom Alyssa.c
nice story next time try to be more descriptive
ReplyDeletefrom brooklynn
GREAT story Madison! Very creative ideas. Next time go over it and edit it before you hand it in. Overall it was good.
ReplyDeleteZena!
Hello Madison,
ReplyDeleteI really like the thought that's gone into your story - you've developed a reason for why the girl is there which is very imaginative.
Next time, make sure you proof-read and edit your story for capital letters and full stops and to check it makes sense.
Keep writing Madison - you've got some great ideas! I look forward to reading more of your work one day.
All the best,
Miss Dodd
(Team 100WC - Banbury, UK)