…As she lifted the lid … the clown pop out
of the tiny cup lid, she screamed the circus is a very bad place we are leaving
and john you are coming with me but mum nope no buts ha ha ha what you said
buts oh come on in the car now young boy we have to go home the circus is no
place for a three year old boy you can play videos games at home with you want.
Please mum can we stay a little longer ok but five minutes come on mum please
can we play the ring toust.
By Sarah
Haha! Very creative sarah! Next time remember speach marks and re-read it once you have finished to make sure it makes sense! Great job Sarah!
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Great story!!! I loved the surprise at the start about the clown. Keep up the great writing
ReplyDeleteYou make the first half 1 big sentence. You should use commas and periods. But it was great and creative.
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