Wednesday, May 6, 2015

Sarah - Once upon the time


There were three tiny kittens their names were
Tom kitten (the oldest) mittens (the youngest)
Moppet the middle kitty they love to be respectful
To their mum, but the mum like to be dirty, but they had to get ready
 The Kittens tried to scrub her she meowed. Then brushed her they then
Combed her face, she was naughty and scratched tom.
Mittens got her dressed in a beautiful clean white dress with
Lite blue lace. Moppet puts her outside for a moment to get ready
For the party and then they finish it, when the kittens go outside to get
 Their mother….
By Sarah  



5 comments:

  1. Oh no! Your story has left me imagining all the trouble that their mother may have gotten up to whilst left outside by herself. In my mind, her beautiful clean dress is no longer very clean at all. :-) What did you imagine when you wrote it?

    Well done Sarah! You have written a very creative text that cleverly twists a classic story. To take your writing to the next level, be sure to edit your work focusing on punctuation. This will help the reader enjoy your writing even more.

    Thanks for sharing your writing with the world. Keep up the great work.

    Miss Fay (Team 100WC)
    Sydney, Australia

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  2. now sarah can I have the white dress : ]

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  3. That was great Sarah! I love all the creative names! Eg: Tom, Mittens and my favourite: Moppet! Next time try to use more fullstops! Overall, i thought it was great!

    Zena!

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  4. Nice story Sarah I kind of like kittens but i don't get what fiery tale story are you trying to recreate.

    by Ben Mercer

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    1. the story tom kittens I could show you at school one day by sarah room11

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