Monday, May 4, 2015

Ruby - The royal beach party


It was the day of the princes beach party. Every teenage girl in the city was invited.  Cinderella got out of bed,  put on her blue bikini,  did her hair and makeup and went down stairs.  When she got down she saw a horrid sight, her two step sisters ( who are quite plump ) were trying to fit into hot pink bikinis.  After they realised that bikinis weren't for them they got into more suitable swimwear and were off.  They partied for hours.  When the fun had stopped the prince got on the stage to announce his bride. His bride to be is ...
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5 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 5, 2015 at 4:07 PM

    I loved your story ruby next time try and make your sentences a bit longer.

    From Brooklynn

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  2. AnonymousMay 5, 2015 at 4:13 PM

    Good work Ruby you used good description

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  3. AnonymousMay 7, 2015 at 3:11 PM

    That was a twist on cinderalla?! Maybe though next time you could re read through some of your sentences so then the make sense...

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  4. AnonymousMay 16, 2015 at 9:39 PM

    Great story!! I would love to go to that party!!

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  5. AnonymousJune 10, 2015 at 2:09 PM

    I loved your story I like how you used hot pink bikinis instead of bikinis
    Your story makes me want to read more and more
    Ruby ( valley school)

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