Wednesday, May 20, 2015

Olivia - .....but the ferocious wind........

We were on the plane for fiji to wellington and the pilot say the ferocious wind is coming. Hold on tight because the plane is going to rock to side to side and up and down so tight your seat belt. We could see the  umbrellas going inside out for the plane window. Me and holly were screaming and laughing because it was a roller coaster . but the ferocious wind didn't stop us for having fun
 
 
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6 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 23, 2015 at 11:30 PM

    I love how even in a tough time you talk about having FUN!!
    Good story Olivia, just check your story after, make sure it makes sense!

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  2. AnonymousMay 24, 2015 at 4:34 PM

    Nice story Olivia!
    Just remember though that places like Wellington need a captial letter at the start.

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  3. AnonymousMay 24, 2015 at 4:38 PM

    Olivia nice story!
    Although next time remeber that Wellington needs a capital because it's a place
    From Alyssa.C

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  4. AnonymousMay 24, 2015 at 4:43 PM

    I LIKE THE ABOUT YOU HAVING FUN,RE READ YOUR STORY
    FROM JET-LI

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  5. AnonymousJune 3, 2015 at 9:55 AM

    You made your story really exciting, Olivia, by describing what was happening because the wind was so strong - it would be quite scary wouldn't it? I love the sense of pace in your story. I think that you could probably think of another word to replace the first use of 'ferocious' because you have used that twice. If you look in a thesaurus you will get lots of ideas. Well done for writing such a good story for the 100WC.

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  6. AnonymousJune 29, 2015 at 6:50 PM

    It sounds very frighting and fun at the same.

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