"Dad are we there yet?" said Josh. "No" said dad. "Are we there now" said Josh. "Yes" said dad. "Hurry were going to miss the tour" said Josh. When they get in the chocolate factory they join up with a group. "Dad look at all that chocolate" said Josh. When they were walking through the factory the fire alarm went on so we had to quickly run outside. I think they burnt the chocolate. Well it turns out that it was a false alarm. When we got back in side they gave us free chocolate.
By Adam
Hi Adam. I love your punctuation. I like the sentence: "hurry were going to miss our tour". This story makes me extremly hungry!!! Your getting better and better each week. This is the best story u have done so far. I like how u made it like a emergency. Keep up the amazing work. From Brayden, valley school. 😃
ReplyDeleteHi Adam. I love your punctuation. I like the sentence: "hurry were going to miss our tour". This story makes me extremly hungry!!! Your getting better and better each week. This is the best story u have done so far. I like how u made it like a emergency. Keep up the amazing work. From Brayden, valley school. 😃
ReplyDeletehi adam I like your wording in your story it makes it interestng
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