I woke up.The noise was deafening, like a srecing sound.I was in a black Iron cage, and I was going up and up and up……… There were wooden crates around me with labels saying (FOOD) and others with (WATER). All I could remember was my name… Johnny
The Box/cage was slowing down and then stopped. A crate of water landed on me and knock me out…….
“Yo dude, what’s your name” said a tall but then teenager with black hair. I looked up, I was on the top of a tall sky tower. “It’s Johnny”
By Brodie
nice story Brodie I like the idea it was great next time kind of make it into one story instead of paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteBy Ben Mercer Broadgreen Intermediate School Nelson
nice story Brodie i like how you changed your your place
ReplyDeletefrom luke rm 11
good punctuations and pargraph
ReplyDeleteBy Dom room11
I found that this part in your story did not make sense this is what it is, said a tall but then teenager with black hair.
ReplyDeleteI have a mate who said the start was like maze runner.
By josh
Otautau school.nz
I like how you described the black iron cage.the second last sentence didn't make sense
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