Monday, September 7, 2015

Ben - The Girl screamer


There was once a girl named Kathryn,she was 4 year old and she loved screaming it was so loud that The noise was deafening it was crazy loud each day that Kathryn's brother jeff came home from school she would scream her head off Kathryn made jeff pass out it was terrible their mum Kat came in the room and took Kathryn to the hospital to get her screaming checked out, and apparently her voice box was bigger than an average 4 year old voice box so she had surgery and her screaming was her just talking...

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3 comments:

  1. AnonymousSeptember 8, 2015 at 4:03 PM

    Great story Ben, next time add more punctuation.


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  2. AnonymousSeptember 8, 2015 at 4:03 PM

    i love your story ben great use of language. It's a very good story. You have great use of descriptive language. Great job!!! keep up the good work!
    Chavawn.C

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  3. AnonymousSeptember 13, 2015 at 2:30 PM

    Hi Ben, great story I like how you said It would make Jeff pass out. Next time add more punctuation.
    From Andrew valley primary school :{ ;{ :] ;] ;) :)

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