The pathway Emma took was nothing more than dirt littered with random rocks..
The air was warm, the beams of sunlight glowing on her skin.
The wild flowers were a riot of colour on the fading green.
Beech trees overlooked a pale lazy river, Emma carried on her adventure.
She sat down on the cold lush grass underneath a large Beech tree.
After reading her favourite book she put it down and went for a walk.
She bent down and found a small key that glistened in the lush green grass, She wondered what it was for, Excited, she ran home and told her brilliant news.....
By Caitlin.
This is really cool, but at one point you said the grass was fading but then you said it was lush and green!!! And you had a capital (E)xcited in the middle of the sentence.
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Kaitlyn
I really liked how you said the beams of sunlight glowing on her skin. I think you need to reread your story because some of it doesn't make sense. Over all your story was a good story.
ReplyDeleteMarika Valley School
Wow great story : ). love the verbs. I wonder what will happen? Alex.
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