Mum was out, my little brother is out, it's time to snoop. I open all the cupboards, all the draws and nothing yummy. And I remember, mums wardrobe, I run into her room and looking at all that CHOCOLATE made my stomach rumbled. I stick my hand in the little box that the chocolate was in. I hear something outside, I have a look and oh no its my mum! I run into the lounge and she came in looked around shut all the draws and cupboards, then walked off shhh dont tell anyone but I have a chocolate bar ;)
By Maddison
I love this story. I liked all the punctuation you used. Next time you should add some more describing words.
ReplyDeleteMaegan
Otautau School.