It was a lovely morning at the campsite, it was silent except for the mosquitos, lots of mosquitos. Johnny unzipped his tent fly and went to the lake to begin his morning row. He was having lots of fun.
It was now ten o’clock and he was eating hot chips for brunch. He was soaking up the sweet sun and reading his new book called ‘Stormbreaker’ the first book of his favourite series ‘Alex Rider’. It was about a boy who goes undercover as a spy and finds out information for the government. He then fell asleep.
Good work Danny liked it when you used a paragraph and it caught me when i read the first sentence.
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Nice story danny I liked how you used a lot of punctuation. from sam cur
ReplyDeletewonderful work danny. harriett
ReplyDeleteadd some more adjective but great work
ReplyDeleteCaleb Andrews
(fly and went to the lake) you could have said he flu to the lake not fly By
ReplyDeleteThe writer of the above comment needs to read the story again, doesn't understand what a 'tent fly' is. Great story Danny. Did Johnny get a bad cold at the lake (flu ?)
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