I went hunting with my step brother Andrew at night. When we were hunting rabbits we came across this massive tree. I looked in the tree there were 2 red eyes looking at me. "MMMM some delicious blood to eat", said the bat "Brother lets go get him... What they left me!! Maybe cause I slept in". "Andrew the bat coming straight for me" I yelled "Watch out" Then Andrew whacks the bat with his gun" "Thanks" I said "Well I guess I'll go in to that cave"said the bat
By Adam
Nice punctuation Adam. But try to re read it. Because some full stops are missing. I can picture the story in my head but it doesn't really make sense. Nice job anyway. Keep up the good work Adam. From Brayden valley school.
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