"Bad weather again!" Kiwi sighed from his perch in the fern bush, it was the third day they had had really bad weather but today was definitely the worst! He decided to go and see his friend spoonbill, he would know why it was so stormy.
"So what do you think spoonbill why are we getting so much rain?" Kiwi had just explained every thing from the weather to his question. "Kiwi it is really obvious why the weather has been so weird it's because it's win.... RUN!!!!" Kiwi was really confused why would they run but then he looked around....
By Alyssa C
Wow Alyssa, I really liked your story, as it had alot of speech to make it thoroughly exciting.
ReplyDeleteby Caitlin
Nice Alyssa nice descriptive language in your writing next time use more and it will be great.
ReplyDeleteBy Ben Mercer Broadgreen Intermediate School.
Good job Alyssa. I like how you used adjectives. I would like to hear more.
ReplyDeleteby Madison Curtis.
Great job! I really like how you said "Kiwi sighed from his perch in the fern bush"
ReplyDeleteFrom Kiana Carter (Valley School)