I walk into a little pet shop and I look over to the little dark corner of the room and wonder what could be there. I get off my very uncomfortable green plastic chair and walk towards the dark corner. But i'm stopped by the shop owner “I have never seen such a beautiful little boy before” she said. The old lady has an eye patch that's weird I thought. she said “I bet you wanna see what is that corner well will show you” she nudges me over there all i could see were to red eyes…..It was a unicorn
By Maddison
Great story who would think that all that you could see were red eyes and it was a unicorn
ReplyDeleteRiley
awesome a unicorn in the shop great punctuation an grammar there is nothing to change from what i can see
ReplyDeletefynn
Love, love LOVE the ending "..... it was a unicorn" Great use of the prompt. Next time you could work on having some more excitement in the start of the story!
ReplyDelete~Anna
Hahahaha I love how funny your story is, but make sure it makes a bit more sence next time. ;)
ReplyDeleteFrom Alyssa.M
Great story. I want to hear more. I love your twist and maybe next time you could use imagination anyway great story keep them coming
ReplyDeleteSamira Valley School
Nice story Maddison.
ReplyDeleteI really like the bit when you described the old lady.
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