It was Christmas Eve and every child was happy and so were there parents. But the charls family couldn’t afford to buy the kids a toy but the kids didn’t know that so they begged and begged for one specific toy that was 150 dollars and it was the biggest toy in the shop and there parents didn’t know what to do so they left the shop with no toys and nothing to rap. But that Christmas morning there were present underneath the tree and their grandfather was cooking breakfast for them and the kids said it was a Christmas miracle.
By Jordan
Good story, but you need to work on your punctuation. The line that starts with: But the charls family, is way to long.
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