Today is a big day for me i’m on New Zealand got talent. I’m walking up to the desk I can see all my fans and there all cherring for me. I can hear the crew saying people names to go up on stage. i can see all the funny people getting buzzed and it so funny.then my friend go on and gets the gold buzzer. The gold buzzer sends you straight to the siemi final. He is so happy when he comes out. The crew calls me out to do my porfomce. I can hear the notes of the pinono.
By Luke
when you have a fullstop put a cap letter on.
ReplyDeleteFrom Mint Sauce
Nice story luke nice language that you have used next time look out for capital letters in your writing.
ReplyDeleteWow a great story with a great purpose. Next time remember to put captails.
ReplyDeleteFrom fynn
luke you need to make sure your caps in your story and when you said I can hear the notes of the pinono it's actually piano.
ReplyDeleteI like how you described it like it was happening right now. Next time though remeber full stops.
ReplyDeleteFrom Alyssa.C
I like how you said the crowd was cheering I can piture it in my mind achullly
ReplyDeleteI liked how you said the crowd was cheering really discriptive words.
ReplyDeleteLuke Raisbeck (valley school)