Tuesday, May 3, 2016

Week 1 - Cold by Ruby



Mark’s blonde hair flopped in front of his face. He was staring down at his feet as he walked, his hands buried deep in his pockets. He had goosebumps on his pale arms and legs. He shivered, he hated winter it was always so cold and dark, unlike summer where it's all warm and bright. He thought back to his summer holidays and how fun it was. He wished it was the summer holidays again. He was happily thinking about his holidays when suddenly he walked into an older girl. She looked about 20 or so, she had short pink hair, colourful blue eyes and a beautiful smile. Mark couldn’t help but smile back.

By Ruby

3 comments:

  1. You have 114 words when the limit is 110 The word police















    Kynan

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  2. Amazing story Ruby! I like the describing words you used.
    ~Amber T :)

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  3. Great job but some of your sentances are quite long
    Caleb Andrews

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