Wednesday, May 4, 2016

Week 1 - Embarrasment by Caleb


It’s was the day the day were I would get my gold star. I had waited all year for this and It’s had to get, only about 50 people get it.But then suddenly I realised I need 10 more points. I’m so close and then I realised the only Pacifaca.So I dont do it I dont get my gold star. I don’t care I’ll just not get it and not get the day off.

By Caleb
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6 comments:

  1. AnonymousMay 4, 2016 at 2:39 PM

    Nice,but next i think you should read over your story,Harriett :/

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  2. AnonymousMay 4, 2016 at 2:43 PM

    You have 74 words the limit is 90-110 Kynan [Word Police]

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  3. AnonymousMay 4, 2016 at 2:49 PM

    I really liked your story but next time check through your work more carefully for punctuation and to make sure it makes sense. Well done Ruby

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  4. AnonymousMay 4, 2016 at 2:49 PM

    You dont have enough words Caleb you only have 73. by Sam

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  5. AnonymousMay 4, 2016 at 2:56 PM

    you need to check your punctuation.

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  6. AnonymousMay 4, 2016 at 2:59 PM

    What do you mean by 'Pacifica'?
    I like the urgency in the story
    By Luke

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