Bang went the thunder. I was lying on my bed in silence staring out the window with my orange pyjamas on, when I saw a bright blue light so I walked outside and crept towards the light. It was only a tiny little flashlight that had been dropped and kicked around. Then there was an old woman that yelled earthquake!! I screamed until I couldn't scream any longer. About 2 hours after I was sitting in my room with a broken picture frame on my desk and a smashed piggy bank and my floor along with a dollar or two. Then there was a noise that sounded like there was a train about to come through the wall in my room it was a tsunami. The water flooded through the windows I swam and swam and swam but It was no use everything was gone
By Scarlett
I really liked your piece of writing. The bit that I really enjoyed was Bang went the thunder. I was lying on my bed in silence. Next time use some more punctuation.like commas, and question marks.
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