Once upon a time there was a evil little devil named vail drabic who liked ripping out people's intestines and eating their guts.Then when he was bored he went for a walk a man that looked like this jumped out of the bush.and took vail dabric to a staircase that lead up up up to.the sky then a song played “i’m on a staircase to hell i’m staircase to hell so
Vail waited there for twenty five million hours.the he decided to walk up the staircase when he got to the top.
Vail jump and died.
Well done Conner I thought it was very cool when the devil was ripping out intestines and guts and also I thought it's very cool that you added the pictures, so I think you should get a showcase. Here's my link, https://edu.nightzookeeper.com/stories/5732060bbe43290300b45bc0
ReplyDeleteok that was a little violent connor but i like how you told "Vail"s back story next time check that you have all of your writing is the same tense because when you said Vail jump and died thats using both present and past tense.
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