Two men were sitting outside a busy cafe. One of the men were reading a book about the past and future. Unexpectedly and man dressed in boots a fancy suit and a hat showed up in the set next to him. The two men started to talk about the calm weather and how sunny it was. After a few minutes of talking about the weather the man in the suit asked what is was like in the future. The man with the book replied ”In the past thirty years a lot of new things happened for example the first successful heart transplant from animal to human.” The man in the suit stood up and walked away.
Great job. All I can see wrong is some grammar mistakes. Maybe you could reread your story next time. - Sophia
ReplyDeletehi, I like how you had lots of descriptive language in your story.
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Dear Michaela,
ReplyDeleteGreat story I really enjoyed it. I like the way you described the cafe and the man. I wonder why the man in the suit walked away? Here's a link to my story please comment
https://msbrennocksclass.100wc.net/holidays-by-molly/
From molly
Great story Michaela,
ReplyDeleteNext time make sure to check your punctuation.
~Amber T :)
great story.But the second line did not make seance
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