I heard police cars round me i knew i was caught,well he shouldnt rip me off next time i was angry and he was injured the police came out of the car with a gun and said put your hands up i put my hands up and hopped into the police car we drove down to prison the throw me into the sell it was dusty and gross.
By Harriett
hi, next time you could add more detail and descriptive language because it was a little boring
ReplyDeletefrom scarlett(:
100 words! maybe re-read this next time harriett!
ReplyDeletecharlotte
I like how you said that the prison was dusty and gross maybe next time use a more exciting words for said e.g yelled or growled and remember to do a capital I.
ReplyDeleteOlivia
And also remember to make it 100 word.
ReplyDeleteOlivia
I like how your described what the cell looked like maybe next time use a similie and make it 100 words.
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