I imagined what it would be like to have all I could see, Hmmmm , I thought to myself. Should I choose the lamborghini or the ferrari? I am currently the world's 2nd richest man in the world. The first being Mexican gangsta,which I am currently trying to track down. I am trying to find a car that I like. Even though I own a Mustang, Bugatti and a Maclaren, my grandmother says I need a new one. After a while I chose a lambo. The next day at around midday I went for lunch.I did not see the sniper waiting for me. He shot but I didn’t feel any pain. I was rushed to hospital.
This is my life. I go to work, I go buy something!!!, and then I get shot at.
By Luke
I like how you used lost of vivid verbs and lost of punchaution. but I think you should have a space after ganster,. By Jacob.
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