It was a normal day at the park, a warm breeze swept over the city. James had opened his bag of gummy airplanes and had eaten a yellow one. there was the sound of little children playing and an awful five-year-old trying to play a violin. Suddenly there was a ‘Screech!’ and then a ‘BANG!’ that sounded not far from the park, James along with lots of the other people from the park sprinted towards the crash site. It was a car but it didn’t look accidental.
It was now a week ago that the crash had happened and the person behind it had been imprisoned and the injured people were recovering.
By Danny
Nice story Danny next time remember to use capitals after a full stop. Sam cur
ReplyDeleteHi Danny, I like the how you put accidental you used great punctuation you made the story really funny, I love how you used sprinted I wish you put the mans name that got arested Keoni room 4 valley school.
ReplyDeleteGood story. It was very good.Put capital letters at a beginning of a new sentence.
ReplyDeleteSARAH LEE